HELLO haiku poet! This is beautiful! You nailed it! You got the 5-7-5 rhythm, and you also managed to get a kigo in there- a seasonal reference - to spring. And THEN you got the kireji - WAKING -the cutting word between the juxtaposed light and dark! WOW. I'm super impressed. May I edit your future book of haiku? ;)
Thanks - you have no idea how happy it makes me to read that I did it right - silly, but it means a lot to know the hour it took to put this together properly has been rewarded by appreciation.